Dr. Pepper () Wrote:
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> While I applaud your gumption, I have to say that
> your lack of literary prowess and emotional
> diatribe will more than likely land your letter in
> the circular file to all that receive your
> letter.
>
> Much of your basis and content is factually
> inacurate, and contradicted by statistics that
> your intended audience will undoubtedly know (e.g.
> the MS-13 inf...The "Mafia" reference that sounds
> more like the monologue of a raving lunatic
> waiting for a prescription to be called in than a
> concerned citizen...)
>
> ...Considering a political figure or potential
> recipient of such correspondence -- you need to
> cater to the audience - supported fact, with a
> spin on why they should care. Your letter lacks
> both. You need a solid basis for what you are
> presenting, as well as statements that articulate
> why what is important to you is important to
> them.
>
> And as for Connely - she is no friend of
> anti-immigation reform, or the local PD...just
> look at her voting record.
>
> Better luck next time.
I appreciate your critique. I know the letter is weak in the current form. I just whipped it up and threw it out here to see what fire I would draw so that the next version will have some real meat to it. Your advice is well noted and I will post the next version soon.
I do not see how the facts are wrong. there is evidence to support what I wrote as shown below. There is also evidence that law enforcement is doing something, but they are missing the mark.
http://earthops.org/immigration/ms13-killcops.html
http://www.streetgangs.com/magazine/083104msva.html
http://www.washingtonpost.com/wp-dyn/articles/A47558-2005Jan29.html
http://baltimore.fbi.gov/dojpressrel/pressrel07/ba092407.htm
And this guy who has lived here for some time says:
" have lived in Fairfax County since I was 10 and the crime has definitely increased over the years but is not as bad as in some areas. Like the posts before me, try to avoid Falls Church, Alexandria, the Rt 1 corridor and the Edsall Road area (MS-13 territory). The Annandale area is starting to get an increased crime rate as well inside the Beltway (increase in gang activity). I have also driven a school bus for FFX County and would have to say that the areas with the most crime and issues school wise are Stuart and Annandale High Schools, I have driven out of both of these schools as well as the lower grade schools below them and had gang issues with my students (MS-13 and Korean gangs). Probably western Fairfax County is your best bet but the crime is slowly creeping out there as well."